Lyrics in Progress

It's not as bad as it might have been...

I checked (re-checked actually) all my lyrics for possible "if versus when" errors, typical errors Germans make when speaking or writing English. I'm German, I'm no exception. In the end I modified three lyrics:

- call a spade a spade

- up to you (there are two "up to you's", it's the first one I wrote, yet the second in the collection)

- Vanity (here I left the "when" but changed "you'll" to "you" because I actually meant "whenever" from the beginning; if the meaning is "whenever" you can use either "if" or "when" - I prefer "when")

I also rewrote "scavengers" regaining the rhyme I first had in mind: lost - crossed - toss.

The updated versions have been replaced in the file that's available from the internet archive, I also posted them on my home page under "latest additions".

Mixing up the words "if" and "when" is a typical German mistake when speaking or writing English.Both translate to the German word "wenn". "if" can also mean "falls", and "when" can also mean "als". But when(!) you have the German word "wenn" it can be either. Sometimes it MUST be "if", sometimes it MUST be "when", sometimes the choice is yours.

Only after publishing my rewritten and/or corrected versions of all lyrics that I have written so far I discovered two mistakes regarding "if" versus "when". As for "scavengers" I'm still not even quite sure, but I wanted to alter the text anyway because I was not happy with rhyming "crossed" with "robbed" so I used this opportunity to eliminate any doubts regarding "if" and "when" as well. In "call a spade a spade" it should have been "if" from the beginning - the "when" was clearly a mistake, since I use the word in a condition. I'm checking the other lyrics at the moment.

they shot a missile 'cross my day
I watched my thoughts fade away

I'm hoisting up the flag of truce
though I was told there was no use

I found my lover in my bag
I pulled her out to have a shag

they took my hand, stowed it away
I've got another, so that's okay

I shake my head to get it loose
and I don't care what you deduce

some kill for bread, I kill for rhyme
it's just the way I spend my time

I have no idea what will come out of this - or not. Except that the last two lines should be placed at the end, SHOULD anything come forth. Remarkably, the first two lines were the first that came up...

Lunch-time lyrics, yet again. Put down darn quickly, yet quite good anyway - quality has nothing to do with the time one spends on things. You could tell that I'm proud of them. And their not nearly as sleazy as I myself expected them to be. Maybe I should send Rhymezone.com a donation - I used it a lot again this time.

you're playing hard-to get
so you'll appear respectable
but I will prove to you
that all doubts are neglectable
I always take a pride
in overcoming obstacles

then
by morning I will have had you
and you will have this look
of a cat that's got the cream
by morning you'll have had me, too
and we both will have
lived up to our wet dreams

you want to talk it through,
make sure we act responsible
you were not quite sure
if I'm all honourable
I just smile and say
Babe, you are adorable

and
by the morning I will have had you
and you will have this look
of a cat that's got the cream
by morning you'll have had me, too
and we both will have
lived up to our wet dreams

by morning I will have had you
and you will have this look
of a cat that's got the cream
by morning you'll have had me, too
and we both will have
lived up to our wet dreams

***

There's no bridge - room for a cool guitar solo ;-)

I had posted "Beco" on several discussion boards. Although there were very few reactions, there was one particular remark that helped me improve the chorus.

risks are taken
all limits broken
breaking loose
tires lose their grip
a wall is hit
this is bad news

Someone noted that the expression "a wall is hit" focuses on the wall instead of the driver. Now it reads:

...

one loses control
his car hits the wall

...

Much better!