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14. Dezember 2013 6 14 /12 /Dezember /2013 12:31

I had posted "Beco" on several discussion boards. Although there were very few reactions, there was one particular remark that helped me improve the chorus.

 

risks are taken
all limits broken
breaking loose
tires lose their grip
a wall is hit
this is bad news

 

Someone noted that the expression "a wall is hit" focuses on the wall instead of the driver. Now it reads:

 

...

one loses control
his car hits the wall

...

 

Much better!

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