1. September 2013
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I just told Nici that I'm a rhyme-addict. It's amazing how my 'addiction' often(!) changes the direction of my lyrics. One example is "let's procratinate" that I originally intended as derisive lyrics, making light of procrastinators (I had a particular person in mind). In the end the lyrics came out cheering(!) procrastination as a valid od even preferable way of life.
Similar things happened to "am I counting". This could have made a rather depressing song. The chorus - that I wrote first - leaves this option open, although the first two lines are a little obscure:
am I counting three, four, five?
am I counting for my life?
do I count for you at all?
will you stop me in my fall?
am I counting
The first verse still could lead the song in a serious direction:
I guess that I have made some mistake
that caused me to fall from grace
once you would smile at me kindly
now you're screwing up your face
In the third verse (self-)irony begins to creep in:
from love to lover I kept moving
somehow like a butterfly
my life used to be so easy
suddenly this stopped, but why?
Actually this verse has bridge-character, changing the direction of the song. The designated bridge just expands on this new direction:
when someone makes demands
it causes me to run
don't you understand
that I just want some fun
I never meant no harm
so what caused you to sway?
I must have lost my charm
why have you turned away?
I actually leave the answer open, but it's rather obvious anyway, isn't it?
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31. August 2013
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... and can tackle my self-imposed task, compiling a new - real big - lyrics collection. I'll check, correct, and edit the lot, replacing one or the other with an improved re-write, like, for example, "who I am". This will take a while since I don't intend stop writing more lyrics at the same time, heading towards the next 333 to publish ;-)
Number 333 is not exactly outstanding. It actually begins real corny:
"I'm riding in my car"
Now, if this isn't the most overused cliché of all times! The title is "I could do it all the time" - and if you're guessing what it is about you're probably right ;-)
Number 332 was "don't you feel it". I had written about it on this blog. Here is the recording
There is no digital clipping in the chorus, by the way. I used an overdrive effect to give my voice a more rock-like feel. My voice may agree with folk, it certainly doesn't with rock. Unfortunately, I like rock music much more than folk. Even more unfortunately, people listen to the production, not to the ideas behind it, as much as you claim that whatever you do is just providing some very rough demos or drafts. Hence the overdrive - it might bring the recorded vocals slightly closer to what I envision. Never mind, we're talking about lyrics here, not about music production...
Have a great weekend!
Bernd
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28. August 2013
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Craig needed an extra syllable in the name to make the text match the tune he had in mind, so "Rachel" became "Emily". Folk-Rock. Here is the song:
"Emily" on SoundClick
... and these are its lyrics
no excitement, neither fun
that was life to her
nothing to look forward to
inside something stirred
being drawn by some unknown force
and bright city lights
she had packed some of her things
and left home at night
she would try to find her way
and hitch a ride
Emily, sweet girl
What have you done
Emily, sweet girl
You had to run
Emily, sweet girl
To reach the sun
Emily, sweet girl
Where have you gone
She had kissed her past Goodbye
and lost childhood days
she would sparkle, she would shine
in her own way
nothing could make her come back
She’d never sway
(Chorus)
all her dreams would soon come true
her share of luck out of the blue
all the visions she would see
everything she’d hope to be
(Chorus)
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26. August 2013
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I will call the song I just mentioned in my last post "DON'T you feel it" - not "can't" as in my example . These are its lyrics:
you keep beating | around the bush
pussyfooting | around me
I don't want to | urge and push
just need to know: | where are we
can't you see it?
don't you feel it?
don't know if I | stand a chance
it could be you | give no dime
is it better | to advance
or do you just | need more time
can't you see it?
don't you feel it?
sometimes you find | me amusing
then you mock me | just like that
often you are |quite confusing
next you are a | pussycat
can't you see it?
don't you feel it?
can't you see it?
don't you feel it?
The pipe symbols indicate rests it the tune. I put them in so I can see how to group the words to make them match the music. These are not exactly my best and brightest lyrics ever, but they will do for a simple rock tune ;-)
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26. August 2013
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I've completed yet another backing track with not the faintest ideas with regard to the tune - the vocal line - or the words. The chorus is very simple. I just listended to the track and found that there seems to be only room for four plus four syllables in the chorus, something like: "can you see it - can you feel it". Then there are two verses that will have four lines with about eight syllables each (could be one less in the first three lines), and a bridge with alternating eight and seven syllables (the last line might have nine). That's what I know at the moment. Maybe I should call it "can't you feel it" and go from there?
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22. August 2013
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This is the chorus that I wrote (the first chorus, the later ones are in past tense):
the rush hour's craze took its toll
a victim's spouse to console
her kid, too young to understand,
reaches for his mother's hand
and says "I cannot sleep
where the angels come to weep"
And this is what the Selfastrays sing:
(And) when the daily rush-hour's craze
takes its victims till we fall from grace
there´s a kid, too young to understand,
reaching out for his mothers hand
and it says "I can not sleep,
where the angels come to weep"
A little more obscure and open to interpretation - which I actually consider an advantage. The song is Punk Rock, by the way, and this is how it sounds:
YouTube Video
Have fun and
take care!
Bernd
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17. August 2013
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The first complete recording. Far from perfect, mind you. The guitar got too loud, I tried to mask it by means of the equalizer. I adopted the text here and there and added the lift that I had scrapped before. And I decided to use the whole line from the chorus as its title. In the seventies the Rolling Stones danced with Mr. D. - in 2013 I refuse to do so:
"Mr. D." on SoundClick
If you want to sing along, here's the chorus:
no, Mr. D., I won't dance with you today
just watch me bouncing 'round, and listen what I say
Mr. D., I won't dance with you today
no, Mr. D., I won't dance with you today
:-)
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15. August 2013
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Because the song would become way too short I'll put the second part of the lift in again, yet only once towards the end of the song. I like that musical part a lot, it would be a pity to NOT repeat it once more ;-)
And yes, there is music! In my mind there always is, but this time I recorded what I had in mind so I won't forget the tune:
first recording
Mind you, it's just a reminder, just a very very rough recording so I won't forget. Maybe I can record it more properly on Friday. I intend to leave it as an acoustic folk tune.
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13. August 2013
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I put the lyrics down in about half an hour so there actually would be nothing much to say about their 'progress'.
Yet I improved - I think it's improving - a line in the first verse:
I can feel your presence
I know that you've been hanging around
I rejoice when you're absent
your presence keeps dragging me down => I changed that to "your closeness keeps dragging me down", "closeness" not only avoids repeating the same word in one verse but is also more fitting.
And after discussing the text on a songwriter board I also scrapped one half of the lift. The lift - or pre-chorus - originally consisted of two parts:
I've known you since a while
and I know there's no escape
yet I'd prefer to carry on
just like I've been doing to date
I won't bid you welcome
and I guess I never will
it makes no sense if you expect
me to give in and keep still
I will do without the second part.
You see, there is a little progress - or change - even in the quick ones ;-) You'll find the complete lyrics where they are supposed to be.
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10. August 2013
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... of "will you fancy me".
The line in the first verse now goes
at unsuitable moments your image pops up in my mind
("impossible" did not exactly hit what I wanted to express)
When I checked the meter by imagining the lyrics sung, I also changed the line
should I chicken out or is there (some) reason to hope
to
should I chicken out or do I have reason to hope
Now I'm happy :-)
*****
Have you discovered my recording of "next in line"? If not, it's on SoundClick
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