rewriting "attracted to you"

The former version of "attracted to you" had some flaws as fellow songwriters pointed out. For example, the word "zest" sounded stilted (Donna's expression) and did not fit 'her' provocative tone. In do you have the grit" versus "how to get it" the meter was off (stressed versus unstressed ending). "I worship the ground" is the stronger and better fitting expression compared to "I admire the ground". Both words can have the same meaning in German, and somehow I seem to never come up with terms that have some religious allusion ;-) "Are you a real man" (someone suggested "true" instead of "real", which I kept), "are you just some helpless shit" (that I've now made "twit"), anddon't act the pansy" were rather redundant. In the end I edited or rewrote three of four verses. The most 'dramatical' change is in the first verse, in the process I could also get rid of rhyming "on" with "on":

I worship the ground
you're walking on
when you flash a smile
it feels like I've won
then you turn your back
and all hope has gone

I'll replace the text on my web site tomorrow.