7. November 2008
5
07
/11
/November
/2008
16:29
I've thought about a chorus for "lost".
So I'm lost
I don't know a way out
Have I crossed
the point of no return?
Will there be
a final last straw
just for me
so that I can turn
I don't like the rhyme "return" - "turn", neither am I happy with the "final last straw". Maybe I'll leave it at that anyway, it's as stupid as "a little bit" - and less common. And I'm still not happy with the last line of the first verse "looks like the end of me". It's too pathetic. At the moment I've got the feeling that "lost" will not exactly become a masterpiece.
So I'm lost
I don't know a way out
Have I crossed
the point of no return?
Will there be
a final last straw
just for me
so that I can turn
I don't like the rhyme "return" - "turn", neither am I happy with the "final last straw". Maybe I'll leave it at that anyway, it's as stupid as "a little bit" - and less common. And I'm still not happy with the last line of the first verse "looks like the end of me". It's too pathetic. At the moment I've got the feeling that "lost" will not exactly become a masterpiece.
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