who I am - II

Two more verses:

in my uneventful working days
I use to dream away the hours
sometimes life is like some boring play
or a joke that has turned sour

commercials meant to wash my brain
wrapped into nonsense tales
they only care to entertain
so they can increase their sales

I used RhymeZone to identify viable rhymes and as a result found: hours - sour, and tales - sales.

My ideas for lift and chorus:

when I'm tryin' to make out some sense
I find deception and pretence

why is the truth opaque
why do your smiles look fake
why do I still not know
who I am

First I wrote "your smile" - singular - but I find that "your smiles" is more open to varying interpretations. For the same reason I think I'll re-write the bridge that I put down:

and I thought I'd found some love
and I thought I'd found some meaning
some perspectice to dream of
a proud future that was gleaming

Like the singular 'smile' in the chorus the first line seems to focus on a personal relationship that might have thrown 'me' off course. But I'd prefer the song slightly more 'generic' so it could refer to society in general as well as to a personal situation.