in the cloud - completed

I did a little fine-tuning, and that was that:

my private data is all out - there => my private data inow s all out there

I'm losing track of my path somehow => I keep losing track of my path somehow [no real improvement on the meter, actually, just an additional syllable to achieve a similar 'feel']

if they want my soul, they can serve themselves => ... they just serve themselves [i.e. 'they' actually are doing so]

my computers's with me at all hours => computers are around me at all hours [the line has actually got weaker, but the meter fits better]

I watch being watched at all hours => you could watch me being watched at all hours [better meter and also funnier]

I didn't come up with a bridge that would add anything, hence no bridge! A bridge that only repeats what has been said is of hardly any use, rather leave some space for a guitar solo ;-)