I describe my ongoing lyrics writing projects. Where I get my ideas, how I match my words with other people's music, which little helpers I use...
Craig made a suggestion to improve the chorus. Gary applied 'tweaks' to the second verse:
Verse 2:
you pay the wage, you're in the driver's seat
I’m the resource that you deplete ['resource' is the correct term here]
yet that’s restricted to the working hours
at quitting time you lose your power [skipping the word 'simply']
Chorus:
I'll take it on the nose
I'll take it on the chin
I'm on the other side
I won't give in
I'm not your slave
I'm not your kin
I've got my pride
I won't give in
There were also suggestions that I have preferred to ignore like:
while I am looking forward to
working somewhere else [instead of "the time when I'll look down on you"]
Although "working somewhere else" is obviously more realistic I like my 'rebellious' version better.
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