Lyrics in Progress

Craig is interested in setting my lyrics (see: "two quickies") lyrics to music. Yet he suggested to insert an additional line in the chorus, and to add two verses instead of simply repeating the two verses from the beginning. To obtain a good flow I proposed to just add one new verse and repeat the one dealing with 'hearing' or 'listening'.

This is the new verse I wrote:

feel this beautiful touch
let it melt the ice that made your feelings freeze
explore the world of senses that waits to be seized
feel this beautiful touch

To lead over to the chorus I then would suggest repeating the very first verse:

hear this beautiful tune
let it wrap itself around your hurting soul
let it carry you to places yet unknown
hear this beautiful tune

The chorus:

listen to the music
inside yourself
listen to the music
open your mind
listen to the music
inside yourself
listen to the music
inside

I must admit that I don't care much for the added part "listen to the music; open your mind" - or any other variant. Although, with an even bar, you normally have two or four lines or parts in the verses or the chorus, respectively, I liked my original three-part structure better. You can always append an instrumental phrase:

listen to the music
inside yourself
listen to the music
inside yourself
listen to the music
inside

[instrumental phrase]