Lyrics in Progress

It's often like this: one line of text springs to my mind and somehow I can't get away from it. This time I got stuck with the line "hey, hey, hey, hey, I can see you flying" that I used as dummy text for the bachgroud choir of Flamur's new song. Anyway, I started from there:

LIFT:

girl, you tried so hard to break away
and go your own way
girl, you tried so hard to break away
but you went astray

CHORUS:

girl, I never reached you
you turned away my helping hand
girl, you never let me
into your life to save you from ruin

CHOIR:

hey, hey, hey, hey, I can see you flying

I'm not happy with the last line of the chorus. It doesn't rhyme and it has got a bit corny. The very last line for the background choir will probably read:

hey, hey, hey, hey, I can feel you dying

Now you can tell what my idea for this song is. The tune sounds melancholic to me - beautifully sad, I'd say, hence it inspires sad lyrics. But actually that particluar line, originally only meant as a placeholder, triggered the direction I am headed.

I will further work on the chorus today, next do the bridge, and tackle the verses last. As for the verses I'm thinking of a typicall 'career' of a drug addict, but I will try to leave it implicit.