28. Februar 2009
6
28
/02
/Februar
/2009
16:21
I think I've got a text for the chorus. The tune is always repeated once, so the text has two parts. I've numbered the lines here so I can refer to them in my comments more easily:
1. time has passed me by
2. since that fateful day
3. I'm too sad to cry
4. since you've gone away
5. life has lost its charm
6. life has lost its goal
7. I had meant no harm
8. I'd just lost control
4. first read "since I've gone astray" which I didn't like that much. After discharging the former line number 6 - "since you've gone away" - I just inserted it here, instead.
6. I had put down "since you've gone away" first, but couldn't come up with any useful rhyme for line 8.
7. I consulted my rhyming dictionary for words which would rhyme with "charm". Among others I found "arm", "calm", or "harm". Reading "harm" I immediately came up with the line "I had meant no harm" which matches nicely with a line in the first part "since that fateful day".
8. After putting down "I had meant no harm" the next line "I'd just lost control" sort of suggested itself. It didn't rhyme with "since you've gone away", though. Therefore, I had to find a new line for position 6. I first noted "life had lost its soul" which didn't seem very clear (I meant to express "you were the center - soul - of my life"), and which I didn't like either. Looking up synonyms for "purpose" and "destination" in a thesaurus I stumbled over "goal". I like "Life has lost its goal" much better.
1. time has passed me by
2. since that fateful day
3. I'm too sad to cry
4. since you've gone away
5. life has lost its charm
6. life has lost its goal
7. I had meant no harm
8. I'd just lost control
4. first read "since I've gone astray" which I didn't like that much. After discharging the former line number 6 - "since you've gone away" - I just inserted it here, instead.
6. I had put down "since you've gone away" first, but couldn't come up with any useful rhyme for line 8.
7. I consulted my rhyming dictionary for words which would rhyme with "charm". Among others I found "arm", "calm", or "harm". Reading "harm" I immediately came up with the line "I had meant no harm" which matches nicely with a line in the first part "since that fateful day".
8. After putting down "I had meant no harm" the next line "I'd just lost control" sort of suggested itself. It didn't rhyme with "since you've gone away", though. Therefore, I had to find a new line for position 6. I first noted "life had lost its soul" which didn't seem very clear (I meant to express "you were the center - soul - of my life"), and which I didn't like either. Looking up synonyms for "purpose" and "destination" in a thesaurus I stumbled over "goal". I like "Life has lost its goal" much better.