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Here's some text with no chorus yet that I put down today:

make me your second thought
let's lead a life in sin
grant me the things I sought
but never do me in

keep me under the carpet
or against the odds
so I'm not on the market
and out of sight of Gods

CHORUS

while we feel in line
let me taste your sex
send shivers up my spine
while our bodies flex

CHORUS

Bridge:
what's the deal today
a climax for a guilty conscience
you have to agree
it's not just a single instance

CHORUS



It has got a bit clumsy here and there. That's due to rhyming mania. I used rhymezone this time:

"never do me in" was there before "lead a life in sin" - now it's become the weaker line;
"carpet" - "market", that's not too bad;
"against the odds" - "sight of Gods", I'm not happy with the "Gods" (never am, only Zeus is an exception because he's such a bastard);
"shivers up my spine" was there first, "while we feel in line", well, could do;
"taste your sex" - "bodies flex", might do as well;
"concience" - "single instance"; that gave the lyrics a direction I was not quite aware of before, but it fits in rather nicely.

Next I'll go about the chorus - the song will be about a couple of two-timers, then I'll see how and if I can smooth out the weak parts.