nothing lasts

I didn't post "memories to last" here because I had written it at one go - nothing much of a process or 'progress' there. But then one guy criticized my old fashioned words causing me to change a few lines:

thread on Songwriter101

Next another fellow writer criticized the lack of flow. I didn't change much then, yet I altered one particular line. Maybe I'll change other lines, too, eventually. First I will await reactions on the singability of my lyrics. The lyrics match a tune in my mind but I don't know if or how they will match the tune of the young lady I wrote them for. Currently they go:

pieces of gold, pieces of luck
precious moments that we share
happiness, hours of love
and to know that someone cares

gentle whispers, fooling 'round
your spontaneous shouts of glee
tender kisses, love unbound
little favours just for me

I will stow all these away
in my private secret shrine
no-one can ever take them
they will be forever mine

memories to last
memories to hold on to
to relive the past
memories of me and you
memories to last

smiling eyes, our lover's vows
enjoying our togetherness
making up after a row
times of utmost blissfulness

I will stow all these away
in my private secret shrine
no-one can ever take them
they will be forever mine

memories to last
memories to hold on to
to relive the past
memories of me and you
memories to last