no war hero - III (or IV)

I actually wrote the verses before I decided to alter the bridge. After rewriting the latter verses and bridge had the same rhyming pattern. I prefer them to differ, so I shifted the lines of the verses as well.

This was my first version of verse one:

he found relief in a brothel near their army camp
browsed magazines in the dim shine of a makeshift lamp
kept target practicing on mothers and their kids
biding his time until the day he'd call it quits

After changing the order of the lines it now looks like this:

he found relief in a brothel near their army camp
kept target practicing on mothers and their kids
browsed magazines in the dim shine of his makeshift lamp
biding his time until the day he'd call it quits

That's actually better because the two sex-related lines do not follow each other immediately, the second being the weaker on top of it.

The second verse goes:

he's not a man who one could readily admire
he'd never ever been close to the combat zone
stupidity had got him killed by friendly fire
they threw him on the dump with clinic waste and bones