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I describe my ongoing lyrics writing projects. Where I get my ideas, how I match my words with other people's music, which little helpers I use...

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I can see you flying: a little patch - and done

I wasn't happy with the slightly different structures of the verses. Not that there had been true rhymes in any. Verse two reads:

 

one day you packed your things to leave Pa and Mum
you hit the road to find your path towards the sun
no-one barring you from reaching for the sky
for once you'd be free and on your own to lead your own life

 

I altered verse one, so it now goes:

 

your life was a drag filled with chores and duties
just because you were the kid in a world of adult rule
you were supposed to function with a smile
they stifled your weak attempts to lead your own life

 

"with a smile" instead of "and to obey", so I have a half-rhyme now. "duties" and "rule" is not too great but will have to do. I also replaced "suppressed" with "stifled" which is stronger and more fitting.

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