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2. Oktober 2013 3 02 /10 /Oktober /2013 13:01

I'm the worm in your apple
I'm the sting in your flesh
I'm the flaw in your theory
I'm the hope that is dashed

I'm the leak in your memory
I'm the guilt that you feel
I'm the wound that keeps hurting
I'm the fly in your meal

why don't you try to accept me
as I am
we both are bound to live together
till the end
while you strive to find your paradise
here on earth
I'm making sure you recognize it
once you're there

I'm the luck you are finding
I'm the early morning sun
I'm the friend who you care for
I'm the days full of fun

 

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I edited the text on the fly, making all statements singular except "the days full of fun". I also edited the line in the bridge that I was not happy with changing "we both are bound to live together anyway"  to ""we both are bound to live together till the end", thus obtaining another half-rhyme in the bridge and making it differ more from the verses. It's pretty short. I could imagine an outro that goes:

 

I'm the worm in your apple

(I'm the luck you are finding)

I'm the sting in your flesh

(I'm the early morning sun)
I'm the flaw in your theory

(I'm the friend who you care for)
I'm the hope that is dashed

(I'm the days full of fun)

 

... where the answering lines (in brackets) are sung by a second voice or a choir. It sounds cool to my ear (as always I'm 'hearing' the song while I write it). Maybe KOMIR picks this one...

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