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24. Oktober 2013 4 24 /10 /Oktober /2013 19:27

The first two verses that I wrote read

 

when she is angry
she strikes out at who gets close
she doesn't care 'bout guilt or cause
she hits hard, if just verbose

when I try her patience
I'll earn her contempt and spite
but I will be compensated
when we make it up at night

 

Since I didn't care much for the word "verbose" I replaced that respective line with "her words like punches on your nose". The short first line matched what I had in mind musically. But after writing another verse I decided to make the first lines the same meter as the others. The new verse goes:

 

when I have trouble at my work
she does not take me seriously
there's not a hint of sympathy
instead, she's making light of me

 

The rewritten verses now read (I also fixed the line "but I will be compensated", that also didn't meet the meter):

 

when she is angry or annoyed
she strikes out at who gets close
she doesn't care 'bout guilt or cause
her words like punches on your nose

 

and

 

when something has got on her nerves
I will get her scorn and spite
but later she will put things right
when we make it up at night

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