Two suggs - but I'm not quite happy yet:
strong winds start blowing from the sea [adds next to nothing]
black clouds are looming _ [a syllable is missing at the end; might work, though]
heavy waves that hit the shore [a syllable - upbeat - is missing at the beginning; should work, though]
black clouds above the sea
a storm will rage
the oceans roar
"shore" would add another rhyme to "roar" and "pour". Might work nicely, after all. I'll check and double-check (that is: listen the music several times while envisioning my words sung to it).
Maybe I should make the first line of the lift "heavy waves WILL hit the shore" - that would make it a grammatically complete sentence and also be consistent with the use of the future tense in the chorus.
Stasy - my songwriting partner from Hot Mama - wrote that he would like to discuss the subject of the song. Normally, such announcements are bad news ;-)
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