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la la la
la la la
la la la la la
la la la
la la la
la la la la la

ohohohohohoho
la la
ohohohohohoho

 

Not much of a 'template', but it displays the numbers of syllables.

 

First I had:

 

broken hopes
shattered dreams
we feel frustrated

our land

our lives

are devastated

 

But when I listened to the music again I found that the stress in the third line lies on the last syllable. I didn't care much for "frustrated" anyway. Now I have:

 

broken hearts
shattered dreams
till we lose all hope
no-one cares
no-one there
to toss a rescue rope

 

There is neither a story nor much imagery - with the exception of the rope. But then, there are not too may words to squeeze a story in. But maybe an image. I've got to write another verse anyway, so maybe I'll make this one the second verse should I come up with a strong image. It's always good to 'draw people in' with the first verse.

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