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8. Februar 2014 6 08 /02 /Februar /2014 12:39

One spelling correction (though inaudible): circumcised - and yes, women can be, and are circumcised, actually mutilated.

 

"young, aroused, barbaric men" instead of "..., and brutal men" (always good to get rid of 'ands', 'buts' etc., and 'barbaric' seems somewhat stronger to me than 'brutal').

 

"I'm most women in the world" instead of "like most women in the world". I admit, that it's not correct grammar, yet it expresses more precisely who 'I' in the song actually is. I couldn't make 'I' 'all women' or 'the women', though, since the lyrics' message is not correct for (most) women in the western world.

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